APRIL 20, 2008, 9:54 pm
Everytime I remember that night....
It was a cold night...
But a special one for me...
You and me...
We...
Alone in the middle of the dark room....
We can see each other,
But no one can see us....
Everybody has already gone,
And we were the only ones who stand...
The bodys,
But mainly the souls,
Together....
The time has stopped,
And the moment.... Became exceptional...
Not even a word has been pronounced like it would make the istant dissapear....
We look to each other,
we took a step... And other... And another....
Until we get face to face....
Your hand touch mine...
And the other one.. My face...
Both had through out my whole body....
I feel like a burning flame nevertheless the rain outside...
'Cause that has became the 'music for our dance'...
I didn't know how to react, however we hadn't already the control of our bodys...
It was our inevitable union...
We let ourselfes fly...
Fly to the moon,
Fly to the stars,
Fly to the paradise....
And no one could stop us.....
'Cause we were not two but just one....
my another moment of inspiration...
but this one is dedicated to 2 persons...very especials in my life..
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Replies for this Blog post
hey.. ..
i know.. the moment u told me..
but u don't have to be sad because of that..
it's only an opinion,
i'm not saying that she is not right..
she is right.. for herself.. and maybe for others here..
and.. in my opinion, u have talent girl.. my little girl!!
don't u understand that?
so.. stop saying that..
any opinion can stop u!!!
be different!!
Hug and kisses!
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Peace and Love!
Potential
I think it has potential, really. And I admire everyone who creates art. But art belongs in the eye of the beholder. For every creation, some like it, some don't. And I have to say that your poem did not touch me.
I would have added metaphores and/or rimes (although some poems are great without rimes). The form of the text wasn't structured (again, some people like it better that way). I have to admit that I'm more of a classical type than modern type. I like it better when there is rythm in the poem, connections between verses and some part left to imagination, as opposed to write the story straight from beginning to end.
But I sincerely encourage you to continue! Like I said, I have lots of admiration for artists!!!
:)
i almost have a moment like that...
and u knew it..i wrte this poem based in that moment..
OMG!! u are such a good writer..
Damn little girl..
u have talent..
i love this poem..
i wish i had a moment like that..
with the person i love..
Wow..
congratulations my little girl..
U R a exceptional person!!!
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Peace and Love!